Response to Be Together feedback

From my first pitch and feedback I have amended and adjusted my idea to incorporate the utilization of several other aspects as well as scraping away at the unnecessary aspects of them.

So instead of the whole concept of having a couple split apart by a war I am going to simplify it to simply just have the man sent to prison and he is going to be behaving well, with the incorporation of riots around him and he is completely out of all of these predicaments. There will be a scene of the man behind the glass just reaching out to grab the woman's hand but they will get interrupted.

There will then be a cut away to a couple of dancers in the studio which has one side white and plain whilst the other is grotty, this will show how they are both viewed as different by society. I will also incorporate the idea of a lost connection though the false pretense of touch.

Flooding the studio and having water being splashed over the male actor in prison could add affect and drama as well as engaging the audience.

A scene of the woman at home on the sofa in bright and vibrant colors to reinforce her being innocent, and also to juxtapose with her upset mood.
A band would appear in limited quantities to allow the audience to really focus on the narrative.

The band would be wearing baggy clothing such as cargo shorts and loose shirts with a tank top underneath.

The band would be positioned on a stage to show there power and to connote there star image.