Feedback to Be Together Music Video Idea

I presented my idea to the class and collected feedback though the camera on my mobile telephone and trimmed as well as color graded it on Final Cut Pro though the use of a LUT loader.
I have compiled a list of the feedback into a list:

Peers:
- consider prison and out of prison because a border is hard to show
- a key problem is that the song is fairly famous and the rights may be hard to obtain 
- may be hard to convey the narrative in a aesthetically pleasing way
- another element is necessary in order to engage the audience for a prolonged duration

Teacher:
- War is massive war is hard to capture
- you cannot not show the war in a war narative and this would dimminish the narative
- the hands could be utilize in a whole new performance should explore the never quite grasping
- Very difficult shoot   
- not enough shots for a full narrative
- Not enough time to show a full narrative 
- Hand could connotative a lost connection
-  Should make it more symbolic than metaphoric