My first ideas and feedback.

We were Instructed to come up with 4 initial ideas for our upcoming thriller, so that we could show them in class, and develop them so that we could collect feedback, and alter the ideas to the received feedback.

Initial Ideas

I created my ideas mainly around the theme of kidnapping, I did not do this intentionally do this, but this is how my ideas developed, and progressed.

1st Idea

My first idea revolves around a group of vigilantes who take criminals children and threaten to kill them, unless the criminal commits suicide,  and leaves a suicide  note admitting there wrongdoings, and leave half of the money for there children, and half for charity.

The opening sequence will begin with men in suits, and anonymous style masks on, breaking into a large manor, and spreading out and looking around for someone, or something.  The men group back together and devise a plan to check every room. After a while they find a boy hidden inside a cupboard. They then drag him out and put him in the back seat of a a van.

Mood Board For 1st Idea

2nd Idea

The whole piece would be About a terrorist group who kill innocent people if the government does not change laws. In the end all of the odd requests add up and legally allow a organisation to be able to do something very wrong legally.

The opening sequence would go as the following; A man driving in the dark, but his engine suddenly cuts out, and after several attempts the car still won't start. 2 suited gentlemen appear out of the dark, and as the man in the car asks for help they taser the man, and they then take him to a van. The man then wakes up with a hood on, but feels around, and feels a dead person, as he shouts the men come in and drag the body out. 

Mood Board For 2nd Idea

3rd Idea

The whole film would be about a group of  young adults who target minorities. And anytime anyone who is not British joins the council estate they will get murdered, and then the body will be left somewhere far away.

The opening sequence will begin with a family from a other country walking along the street having fun, and enjoying themselves, until out of the dark a group of hooded individuals circles them and throws them in the back of a van, and then transports them to a shipping container. After a day they hear police sirens, and the container is opened, with ambulance staff awaiting with food and blankets. 

4th Idea

The whole film would be about a secret underground group who owns a illegal private detective/spy group. They only captured the woman  because they wanted to see if she could take the stress of a kidnap without breaking.

The sequence would begin by introducing a woman cycling though a town, portrayed as being happy, and joyful. She cycles off into a side street were a van with a open side drives alongside, and pulls her off of the bike. She gets told shut up and her hands and feet are bound. The van is then parked up and she gets carried into a sci-fi looking room. 

Presentation, and collection of feedback on 2 ideas.

We were instructed to prepare to present our 2 best ideas to our class, and collect the feedback so that we can alter the idea, and refine the idea.

Here is the video for my first presented thriller idea's feedback, I apologise for the bad audio, and shaky camera, I was trying to not shove the camera in there faces, as to allow there feedback, without feeling intimidated by the camera.



Below is something I created to see the good, and bad about my idea.

Below is my second idea's feedback.

And here is another thing that I used to record the information in the video.

Response, And Adapted Idea.

1st Idea

I have taken account of the feedback, and adapted my original idea.

The adapted idea would follow closely to the original, with the men in suits and masks getting out of a van, and one man telling the other that it is the only way that they could right there wrongs. They would then walk towards the house, then sign messaging each other, then two men run around the back whist more pick the door, and quietly storm the house, each person splits off and can't find anything, until one man searches a cupboard, and finds a child under a pile of clothes. The child is then in a non forceful way taken to a mini van, where he is given a teddy bear.

2nd Idea

The newly adapted idea would go a s following, the men are getting ready, and one gets out his phone and presses a button, then a car engine appears to stop. All of the men get ready, and slowly walk towards the car, they see the man getting scared, they then see him looking at them, and drag them out of his car, and another stars the engine and drives off. The man is hooded, and put in the back of a van, he can feel a dead body, and screams, at that moment the body is dragged out.